jueves, 30 de mayo de 2013

Entry n°7 My paragraph and my mate's version of it. Metacognitive analysis




My paragraph

 The success in cooking a delicious cake usually depends on the selection of the way to prepare it. For example, we can decide to cook it in the oven, as most of the people do. As another example, we can take advantage of the technology by using the microwave-oven. As still another example, we can make use of the typical pot everybody has in our houses, the famous pot “Essen”. Clearly, there are different ways of preparing an exquisite cake but its success is directly related to the method we choose for heating it.


My mate's version (Alonso, Ana Lia)

There are some different possibilities to cook a cake, we only have to choose the most  useful to us. For example, we can decide to cook it in the oven, as most of the people do. As another example, we can take advantage of the technology by using the microwave-oven. As still another example, we can make use of the typical pot everybody has in our houses, the famous pot “Essen”. In conclusion, we have enough possibilities to choose when we decide to cook a cake.

Metacognitive analysis

To start with, I have to say that it was an interesting experience, since it lets us know the other person’s point of view and her way of expressing it. As you can see in the last paragraph, my classmate, Ana, modifid the topic and closing sentence of my own paragraph. However, the overall meaning of the extract did not vary, the idea is the same. On the other hand, I can observe that in Ana’s version there are not synonyms, antonyms, and hyponyms neither in the topic sentence nor in the closing one, which are very useful to avoid repetition. I tried to reflect those aspects in my version, for example, by using the words “delicious” and “exquisite”, as another example, “cook” and “heat”, as still another example, “different ways” and “different methods”. I really think it is a good task to help one another to improve our writings, so Ana: I am looking forward to your corrections of my paragraph!!!

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